Monday, March 20, 2017

Assignment: Story on Bank Robbery


Armed bandits rob Wells Fargo Bank, 250 Long Beach Ave.
 By  Doris Molo

 

Two bank robbers, one wielding a gun, entered Wells Fargo bank in Long Beach at 9:15 on Tuesday, March 12.

According to information obtained from witnesses by Detective John Smith of the Long Beach police department, customers and employees were told to “hit the floor”.  The robbers were in disguise and worked quickly. 

Jolene Fergerson, the teller that the robber approached and demanded cash was able to ascertain that the robber was Black and had a scar on his left cheek; other than that,

she remembered that he had a “very big gun” pointed at her face.

Jose Hernandez, a customer, described the robbers as young and strong. and said one of the robbers as possibly being Latino.  Mr. Hernandez also said he spotted a green American made car parked across the street, but could not be certain it was involved in the robbery.

An eye witness outside the bank, Stella Rivera, said she saw a green car traveling at a high speed, heading west on Long Beach Blvd.  She said she saw 3 men in the car, a Caucasian man at the wheel, possibly in his late twenties or early thirties.  The car made a right, toward the 91 freeway.

Police are still looking for the assailants.  If you have any information, please contact the Long Beach police department.

1 comment:

  1. Your news story is very good. Your description is economical - no wasted words, and your paragraphs are airtight. The only sentence I'd change is this one:

    "Jolene Fergerson, the teller that the robber approached and demanded cash was able to ascertain that the robber was Black and had a scar on his left cheek; other than that, she remembered that he had a “very big gun” pointed at her face."

    I'd change that to "One man approached teller Jolene Fergerson and demanded cash. She said he was black and had a large scar on his left cheek. Other than that, all she remembered he had "a very big gun."

    This a good solid little news story.

    Grade: 95

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